Saturday, May 18, 2019

Globalization Change Indonesia Essay

 Topic

What globalization done to Indonesia

Support Sentence 1
Globalization change how people dressed in Indonesia, follow the trend fashion in the world because of globalization.

Support Sentence 2
Globalization impact to technology in Indonesia, more advance technology that used in every area.

Support Sentence 3
Food also affected by globalization in Indonesia, there is lot of fast food and foreign restaurant

Concluding Sentence
Globalization has change Indonesia a lot in every aspect and in every kind of field in Indonesia. Globalization have positive and negative effect to Indonesia but most of it is positive because of globalization Indonesia grow so fast.

Essay :
Globalization is a process of interaction and integration among people worldwide. What change in Indonesia from globalization process. There is three thing that I would like to talk about there is fashion, technology and food. This three things is the big things that change in Indonesia.
          First is fashion, because of globalization people in Indonesia change the way they dress. People in Indonesia used to be closed and polite clothes now people use clothes that much more open and against the culture in Indonesia. And this happened because people in Indonesia follow the trend fashion in other country that they think much more better fashion taste then how Indonesia dressed.
          Second is technology, in Indonesia technology give a lot of positive effect. People work so much more faster, efficient and easy because of the help of technology. Technology change the way people work not only people who work in office but also industries and even farms. Technology help Indonesia to work faster and better now and it’s a good thing.
          Last is food, and we can see now in Indonesia we can find foreign restaurant and many fast food. People now prefer eating in foreign restaurant because they think the taste of foreign food is better than Indonesian food. Fast food is also can be found everywhere and fast food is the most chosen place to eat. People choosing eating fast food because its easy to get and also we can buy it anytime we want.
          If we see the effect of globalization that change Indonesia have a positive and negative. But I think there is more positive side then the negative. Because of globalization Indonesia is grow so much faster and Indonesia is so much better now then how its used to be.

11 comments:

  1. Hallo aldo, i am so happy to read on your essay but for betterment you can repair you sentences become specific because i think that your essay too general. Thank you, have anice day

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  2. Hi Aldo, your essay is great. good job

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  3. Hi, aldo. Actually your essay is already good, but I think it is too general. Maybe you can discuss about fashion only, or technology, or food. Fighting, do!

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  4. Hi Aldo... I like your essay but I suggest you to make it more specific because I think it's too general

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  5. Its a good essay but its too general. Good job aldo

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  6. Hi Aldo, it's a good essay, you explain the outline clearly but i think your essay is too general.

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  7. hey, Aldo. as it said about formal essay, i suggest you to change word 'i' to another word to make it more formal. overall, you already did a great job!

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  8. hi Aldo, i’ve read your essay and i found it was a very good essay! the way you choose your sentences makes the readers especially me undestood, and it was very good because you put the time phares according to period of the time. Good job !

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  9. Hi Aldo, you have a great essay. I think in academic writing, you need to avoid using first and second person pronouns.
    Cheer up!!

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  10. Hay aldo, your essay too general but actually its very good.

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  11. your essay is already good. that is not too general but not to specific, so you can still elaborate the supporting sentences. good job, Aldo! :)

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